What do you think of these lyrics?

I don’t think its poetry maybe more just a rambling of a talentless noodle fool such as myself. So I deem them as lyrics.

but what do you think?

its about myself. I titled it Me,Myself and I.

Also if you could give me ideas or words that maybe would contribute to it?

or even give me something you hate,dislike or how you feel about yourself.

symbolic figurine of shit
small,fragile, simple, easy to hit
smash to pieces, take some bits

Tossed in a blender
Hit!!! front fender
look to the ground

I see -
I am dirt
pathetic foundation
always hurt, unstable ground
pointless sensation

in a hole
all alone
all I know
its my emotion
but keeps me in motion

I don’t smile
not a style, just a bitch
in denial

COMPROMISE – BROKEN ENTERPRISE

Of, I

Because
I

I lack speed
I lack patience
ANY mental capacity to succeed

I lack confidence
plan of action
dignified reaction

I was born
with a fathers doom
of a witches womb
to pester you

Zero purpose
lost corpse
cold and bitter
pathetic and tender

I reach a wall where I must fly
but the wings are clipped, self use, self abuse
I die
where I lie
when tried to fly

and the angels cry

not for failure , or lack of divine.

rather for shame
That I even carry a name

With a whisper
from demons in my head
mist forms of mirror-mister
days I loved and dread

resurfacing old lies
where destruction thrives

thoughts distort
forced resort

introvert
never convert

destroyed life
dead god’s wife

Iam a hypocrite
varied insignificant

Thin glass,fragile,painted glass. A fake mask.
Thick wall,hollow, colorless and tall. A hollow inside.

As senses excite but fail to ignite.

Anything from within even if, even when.

Beauty touches , ejaculate
emotions scattered , evacuate
Never trust always a must.

Pointless is the point.
Sharpened but dull.

Pointless is the point.
Sharp but can not cut.

I am a point without a point….

Pointless is my point.

Comments

2 Responses to “What do you think of these lyrics?”
  1. XTIAN170174 says:
    May 26, 2010 at 12:32 am

    Start adding the accent & music for emphasis – see how it goes, maybe in the style of Nick Cave to get it going…, or the comedian Steven Wright…., it’s got a percussive-acoustic feel – the stylings of Jasper Carrott could be just right for it….

    Or Chris Rea, Road To Hell…

  2. PRS TruckIN says:
    May 26, 2010 at 12:32 am

    I like em both xD True I am listening to the Killers right now but hey…. Looks and sounds good. Could be a rap or even poetry, play your cards right and that point might make you a couple bucks. xD

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